“Wow!” the audience shouted. The man won the first prize in the grand race, feeling proud and joyful. After the race, he lived high-stepping life. He bought goods without coming up with whether it would be used or not. Soon, he experienced the life that he had never thought before. Once, he went out as usual, not wearing the safety helmet, enjoying the delight of blowing. Unusually, the road that he got through was constructed. Unfortunately, he had to cut down his leg after the accident. To many people’s surprise, he got down to recuperate instead of giving up his life. After working hard at strengthening physical power, he took part in a game which many normal people attended. Though he was a man without one leg, he still won the game. Because of his effort and a little of fortune, he wasn’t a man who did nothing all day long any longer.
race是競速比賽哦？
回覆刪除grand是ground還是就是grand鋼琴比賽？還是壯觀的比賽呢？
第2個字the要大寫喔
回覆刪除Though he was a man without one leg 我覺得這一句可以寫 他只有一隻腳 不要寫沒有一隻腳
Where is the 主題句@@?
回覆刪除come up with =>think about 或 consider 之類的會不會比較好
回覆刪除從頭到尾都是HE
回覆刪除那HE到底是誰?
Because of his effort and a little fortune, he wasn’t a man who did nothing all day long any longer.
回覆刪除這句英翻中之後有點怪XD
After working hard at strengthening physical power, he took part in a game which many normal people attended. →後面的attended是及物動詞 所以要加東西
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